ext_35784 ([identity profile] clauderainsrm.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] therealljidol2017-01-10 10:22 pm
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Work Room - Week 5

The results are up: http://therealljidol.livejournal.com/967722.html
There is another member of our 100 Week Club: http://therealljidol.livejournal.com/967458.html

and a new topic: http://therealljidol.livejournal.com/968050.html

I also brought you a special treat - one of the most iconic members of the 100 Club, and definitely a bit of a legend in Idol circles.

She is one of those people who I have seen grow as a writer over the years. Which has been awesome, but even better, I've been able to see her life transform. That's one of my favorite things, ever. (and she is one of them as well)

Welcome to your Mentor for this week - the one and only [livejournal.com profile] gratefuladdict!

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Hello, Idolers!! Thanks for having me this week. Let's talk about setting the mood!

The ability to create and sustain mood and tone is integral to great writing. This encompasses everything from the chill that permeates a horror story to the impish decadence of pillow talk, from the impassioned persuasive essay to the upbeat, friendly and professional tone of corporate email. It's a skill that draws your reader in as you build your narrative.

So, how do we do that?

For me, the biggest tool is rhythm. When I want to up the stress level in a piece - for suspense, hysteria, etc. - I create disjointed sentences that don't flow well. I'll do several short, staccato sentences in a row, and occasionally throw in a long, run-on sentence, so your reading pace starts to raise your blood pressure a bit.

If you want to see how a master does that, read The Tell-Tale Heart by Edgar Allan Poe. If your heart isn't racing by the end, you have nerves of steel!

You can apply that same technique to create other moods. If you're going for surreal disjointed dream state (my personal guilty pleasure), you can write long, stream-of-conscious sentences that observe more than they judge or act. If you're making an argument about human rights or the culinary merit of sweet potato fries, start slow and measured, then build up to a crescendo of impassioned personal statements.

The key is to read it aloud, or have a friend read it to you. Make sure their voice changes where it should. Make sure they speed up or slow down in sync with the piece. If they don't, you might want to look at your sentence flow again. Shift things until your writing evokes that mood from them.

Another big piece is word choice.

If you are writing that a woman is good-looking, for example, there are a lot of words you could choose from. Is she beautiful, pretty, gorgeous, good-looking, handsome?

Take a step back and think about connotation, rather than just the denotation (literal meaning) of the word. For example, when a woman is described as "handsome," most of us tend to imagine someone whose features or dress are not particularly delicate or feminine. I imagine this woman to be someone who sees wardrobe as serviceable, but is neat and well groomed.

Conversely, if you describe her as "beautiful," I get something really different.* I imagine someone with striking feminine features - probably long hair, big eyes, and a curvy shape. I also infer something about the speaker's perspective - calling someone beautiful could suggest that person has "stars in the eyes" and is awed by her beauty.

And it's not only the connotation to consider here. Say your choices aloud, alone and embedded in a sentence, and see how the words feel in your mouth. They become part of that rhythm as well.

One last thought to consider! Don't underestimate the role that empathy plays in creating strong moods in your writing. If you're writing a personal essay, you might be doing this without realizing it! If you're writing fiction, it takes a bit more work. But if you can immerse yourself emotionally in the moment you are describing, a lot of that mood will come through naturally.

That's enough out of me! How do YOU create mood and tone in your pieces? Are there certain voices or rhythms that feel natural or more intimidating?

After ten seasons of Idol, have you mastered the ominous "hippie about to be kicked" tone?


*Disclaimer: Bear in mind that different cultures and subcultures can have very different connotations for words! It helps to have others read your draft and let you know if any of your word choices feel off to them.

[identity profile] j0ydivided.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 03:39 am (UTC)(link)
I learned a big lesson about what I intend versus what a reader takes away from a piece when I wrote something for a writing group I'm part of, and everyone read the main character as being a man. (She was unnamed, but in my head, definitely a woman.) That's what made me sit up and go, "wait, how am I coming across?" I wish I could have read this advice earlier, if only because it would have saved me from that embarrassment.

This week's prompt...I'm having some difficulty getting away from the song. Death Cab For Cutie was everywhere when I was in high school/my first year of college, and the entire album is fraught with feelings about my first serious relationship. It's going to be fun getting away from that one.

tone

[identity profile] tijuanagringo.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 03:46 am (UTC)(link)
dear gratefuladdict:

I am shiverrrrrring through the most monstrous deja vu because something I have been working on this week, which I had not thought of in terms of idol -- except I guess idol is always in the back of my mind when we are playing it here -- something else I have been chewing on suddenly jumped up and bit me. Aside from being in tune with the topic, love and fear, it also carries a heavy load of mood, and uses several of the techniques you mention and describe as useful for building and sustaining mood. Would you like to take a look at my draft for beta consideration? Thanks.
Edited 2017-01-11 03:47 (UTC)

RE: tone

[identity profile] gratefuladdict.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 04:28 am (UTC)(link)
I'd be happy to!

[identity profile] dmousey.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 04:35 am (UTC)(link)
What does that meeeaaann? 'Hippie about to be kicked' tone? What's wrong with hippies? All they want to do is spready harmony and good will? And for this they get kicked? Do they reeeaaallly deserve this abuse? Why, it would be like kicking an overly friendly dog! I Just. Won't. Do. It. Your Honarables, I object!!

ps... This topic need some ponderance- I must go ponder! Peace~~~



Edited 2017-01-11 04:36 (UTC)

[identity profile] gratefuladdict.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 04:42 am (UTC)(link)
I wouldn't be embarrassed about that!! That's an indictment of cultural norms about gender roles, and nothing more. You can consciously move outside of those expectations and invite your readers to come with you. Your friends in the group just helped you to see that it had to be a bit more overt to translate.

I have written a lot of fiction for Idol, but there are topics that strike a chord with my personal life and refuse to leave me alone until I write them. We all have those personal stories we aren't sure we want to share, because we think they're cheesy, embarrassing, boring, or tired. But if the topic ignites a spark in you, screw everybody else. Take a stab at it. Even if you write it all down and you hate it, you've given it space to breathe and you can move on. But often I think you'll find the topics that haunt you will haunt your reader as well, once you infuse them with that emotion and let us feel it.
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[personal profile] jake67jake 2017-01-11 04:42 am (UTC)(link)

Wait.  This is a song? What song?

[identity profile] gratefuladdict.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 04:42 am (UTC)(link)
Ask our Evil Overlord!!! ;)

[identity profile] j0ydivided.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 04:46 am (UTC)(link)
Since, um, it appears that I am the only unrepentant Death Cab fan in the room tonight:

I Will Follow You Into the Dark (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NDHY1D0tKRA), off Plans.

In Catholic school as vicious as Roman rule
I got my knuckles bruised by a lady in black
And I held my tongue as she told me,
"Son, fear is the heart of love."
So I never went back


is the relevant verse. I hope that helps anyone who wasn't familiar with the song and was stuck!

[identity profile] j0ydivided.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 04:47 am (UTC)(link)
"I Will Follow You Into the Dark", by Death Cab For Cutie. I posted a link to the video and the relevant part of the lyrics below. I didn't think I'd be the first person to draw that link tonight. :)

[identity profile] dmousey.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 04:54 am (UTC)(link)
Okie dokie- EO why?????? Why you no like hippies? Did they steal your VW? Place flowers in your hair? Make you wear puffy shirts and headbands? Sit around campfires singing Moon Shadow?

What created this loathing for the long haired, free love, type?
Please I need to know! (Or I can bribe my child to tell me- hehehehe) :D

[identity profile] dmousey.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 04:58 am (UTC)(link)
I'll have to listen to it. I went and looked it up after you mentioned it. Thank you for posting it!

[identity profile] ellakite.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 05:07 am (UTC)(link)
I have been complimented on my ability to "set the mood" in certain pieces that I've written... but as to how I achieve that, I can only say this: I envision the scene in my head, and I do my best to "paint a picture" of that scene, using just words. To my mind, certain words automatically inspire a certain emotional response in the reader, so I work under the assumption that whatever words spring to my mind when I envision a particular scene will convey the "mood" I am experiencing as I imagine that scene. I won't claim that my word choices are *ALWAYS* correct... but quite frequently, "magic" happens.

PS: At first, I had no clue how to approach this week's prompt, until I read the rest of the lyrics for the song "I Will Follow You into the Dark", and then I realized that I literally *LIVED* the lyric in question. Now I just need to find the time to sit down and write about the experience...

Re: tone

[identity profile] tijuanagringo.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 05:28 am (UTC)(link)
Tell me how to share it with you, please. Choose your weapon. Email or livejournal post? One would be private, but the other would allow others to read and comment.

Re: tone

[identity profile] gratefuladdict.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 05:35 am (UTC)(link)
Totally up to you! You are welcome to email me: stacey.love@gmail.com.

Or, if you'd like to post it publicly and get more feedback, just link me when it's up!

[identity profile] gratefuladdict.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 05:36 am (UTC)(link)
Magic happens because you, sir, are a natural!!

I can't wait to hear more about how you lived that song.

Re: tone OKAY HERE IT IS

[identity profile] tijuanagringo.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 05:39 am (UTC)(link)
http://tijuanagringo.livejournal.com/128755.html

[identity profile] xo-kizzy-xo.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 11:52 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, wow, that's bringing back memories of parochial school...

[identity profile] xo-kizzy-xo.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 01:17 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm getting "I hurt you because I love you". That, in itself, is VERY loaded and very uncomfortable to ponder.

[identity profile] ryl.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 01:53 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, those lyrics. Suddenly I know what I'm writing about and it's a character study I've been pondering for a while. *evil grin*
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[personal profile] jake67jake 2017-01-11 04:17 pm (UTC)(link)
OHHHH... that is a very deep and very loaded area too. Wow...

I'm gonna wander over and listen to the music and lyrics.

[identity profile] rswndrlst.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 04:18 pm (UTC)(link)

"...I do my best to "paint a picture" of that scene, using just words."


Exactly this has been my approach to writing. To the degree of wishing I *could* just draw but I lack depth perception and so it would take a lot of practice to learn. 


I sometimes even sort of act out moments, standing up to envision where people would be standing in a scene and how it would effect their reactions. (Also what they might be holding or using because I get really distracted when reading and objects randomly dissapear in a scene without explaination.)

[identity profile] murielle.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 05:45 pm (UTC)(link)
A big welcome to our new mentor, [livejournal.com profile] gratefuladdict!

So after giving this week's prompt a bit of a brain bounce and coming up blank I turned to the internet. Most of the answers I found focused the fear of losing love, or a loved one. There were also references to teachings of the Roman Catholic church. This I can't relate to, although Proverbs 9:10 says "the fear of God is the beginning of wisdom." There is even a video out there that has the words "fear is the heart of love" in a song's lyrics.

I think I will focus on the first, the fear of losing love, or a loved one. Can't really come up with much else. This gives me something to shoot for in the next day or so.

[identity profile] oxymoron67.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 06:23 pm (UTC)(link)
Man, this one has me stumped.

The prompt has taken me to some darker places, and I'm not sure that's where I want to go. Especially since I feel that my past several entries have been on the darker side.

I don't know if that's where I want to go, if that makes any sense.

[identity profile] my-name-is-jenn.livejournal.com 2017-01-11 06:43 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm a little stumped by the topic this week. I've got a few shimmers of ideas in my head, but they're not fully formed ideas. And even if they were complete ideas, I'd have no idea (heh) how to write the ideas.

Hmmm.

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